I’m going to do something different and hopefully fun beginning today, and judging on the response, may keep doing for several Wednesdays to come.
Have you ever wanted to help someone write a book? Maybe you are writing a book and you’ve reached spots you’re having difficulty writing, or maybe you need some help to make it better. That’s where I am right now and I’m hoping you guys can help. Aaand, when “Ready, Set … Go!” is over, keep your eyes peeled to my monthly newsletter ’cause I’ll be giving away something special to one awesome participant.
Ok, so here’s the deal-e-o. I have a character in my YA epic fantasy, The Chronicles of Fallhollow trilogy, whose name is Eric. He’s an 18-year-old squire from another world. In the second installment of my trilogy, he’s been removed from his very medieval-esque environment and plunked down in the quaint, mountain town of Havendale, Tennessee. He knows nothing of our ways here and things like refrigerators, cars and airplanes are mind-blowing.
As I’m reading through my manuscript, I’ve noticed I’m using a lot of the same ‘shock and awe’ words and it’s time to call out the big guns – you – my readers – to help strengthen the prose. To do that, I’m going to give you a scenario and I want you to describe it. Remember, you know nothing of our world. This is the first time you’ve experienced any of this. Be Eric. Tell me what you’re thinking, what you’re hearing, etc. It can be funny, it can be serious, but in one or two lines or even a few words, describe it in the comments section below.
First scenario: Firetruck racing off with its siren going.
Ready, set … Go!
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Eric heard a great sound like that of a dragon. A strange box-thing raced past him with two wings with vast openings between where a man might put his foot and climb on board the beast to wrestle with it. He saw flames licking the sky and the men riding the dragon got down, tore the wings from the animal, and dragged them toward the crumbling building. His mouth gaped as the wings settled on the building and the men started doing just as he guessed, climbing, in their hands a great snakelike hose attached the dragon and water issued from its mouth.
Hope that helps. Admittedly, on the run, but I think it gets the point across.
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This is soo cool!! thanks for the description!! Nice.
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Eric jammed his hands over his ears, huddling into himself. The screaming punctured through his flesh and bone, more intense than a chorus of banshees. His friends walked on as if the piercing whine, and the howls it encouraged from the neighborhood dogs, wasn’t the slightest bit unusual.
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ooo, I like this. “punctured through his flesh and bone”. Sweet!!
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Ok, off the top of my head with very little thought…
A noise like I had never heard before coursed through me. It blared out from a speeding vehicle. Surely this was a warning of impending invasion. I waited to see in which direction everyone would run so that I could follow, but nobody ran. They barely glanced as the vehicle passed. Why? Was it too late? Were they resigned to their fate? I crouched low on the ground, hands pressed over ears until I could hear it no more, maybe the instructions would come soon.
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I love the visual of Eric crouched to the ground, his hands over his ears. That’s awesome!!
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