The fabulous Brenda Drake is at it again with another fantastic contest. This time the grand prize is a request to read more of your novel by the amazing agent, Ammi-Joan Paquette.
Here are the details, as copied from Brenda’s site:
Title: In the Shadow of the Dragon King
Genre: YA Fantasy
Word Count: 87,000
Pitch: A seventeen- year old boy is thrust into a magical world, awakens an evil threat and sparks a war. His salvation: embrace his destiny, even if it means risking the life of his best friend.
David Heiland sketched the final details on the cat-like eyes staring back at him. Just like in his nightmares, the dragon clung to the castle’s battlement, a body clutched in one talon. Small horns jutted from the top of the creature’s head and two leather-like whiskers protruded from both sides of its snout. Crouched in the shadow of a turret were a man and a woman. Their arms were raised like shields above their heads, terror etched into their eyes and mouths.
Charlotte leaned in from behind, her arms folded across his shoulders. “Wow, talk about a major creep out. I can’t get over how real it looks.” She kicked off her shoes and climbed into the center of the carved, four-poster bed. “Who are the people?”
“My parents,” David said, examining his work. “You know, it’s funny. When I was little, all I ever dreamed was for them to be alive, and someday they would walk through the door and all would be right with the world.”
Good luck to everyone! What a great contest.
5 thoughts on “Can you hit a perfect pitch contest”
Your pitch is great! You know who the MC is, what the conflict is and what’s at stake. Perfect. The excerpt is well written and I would definitely read on. The only suggestion I have is to add a little tension somehow. Great job!
Thanks, Crystal. I did change some things around to add a little tension, or at least give the illusion of it.
It’s really good, you draw me in instantly – one tiny note: I would start it off describing the drawing as if it was really happening, then pull back by telling us David is making it come to life in his imagination.
what a great idea! Off to fix right away! Thanks!
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